716. Mrs Constance Maxwell - Nurse - Durban - South Africa

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1. Ms Lucy 8an? 🙂

2. Re: Ms Amy Vineyard, aged 21 years

3. "substance abuser"? wrong coinage. "who has substance abuse and alcohol issues"

4. Not just substance abuse. She wishes to cease or reduce alcohol consumption too.

5. cigarette smoking is not substance abuse. So "except" is out of place.

6. sexually transmitted diseases

7. Replace "worth to note" with "please note".

8. As for Ms Vineyards past medical history, she has had suicidal thoughts and attempted self-harm once; however, she has never consulted a psychiatrist.

9. Ms Vineyard shares accommodation with a female friend and has no contact with her parents.

10. She started using drugs and consuming alcohol when she was 16 years of age.

11. She sometimes shares infecting equipment. (Make that a separate sentence)

12. for a minimum of two weeks.

13. Her fisrt trumester ultrasound is due at 12 weeks. (Trimester = 3 months = 12 weeks)1. Re: Mrs Constance Maxwell

DOB: 8 August 1934

2. I am writing to refer Mrs Constance Maxwell who presented with symptoms such as oedema of upper and lower eyelids as well as white and sticky discharge from eyes.

3. On 21 February 2006, (use the same date format throughout the letter.)

4. She was diagnosed with bilateral conjunctivitis..

5. She was prescribed Chlorsig drops, one drop in each eye every four hours.

6. On 3 March 2006,..

7. When she revisited today, she appeared very distressed. She couldn't read or watch television due to worsening symptoms.

8. .....I would be grateful...

9. Yours faithfully

10. Doctor1. Re: Mrs Constance Maxwell

DOB: 8 August 1934

2. I am writing to refer Mrs Constance Maxwell who presented with symptoms such as oedema of upper and lower eyelids as well as white and sticky discharge from eyes.

3. On 21 February 2006, (use the same date format throughout the letter.)

4. She was diagnosed with bilateral conjunctivitis..

5. She was prescribed Chlorsig drops, one drop in each eye every four hours.

6. On 3 March 2006,..

7. When she revisited today, she appeared very distressed. She couldn't read or watch television due to worsening symptoms.

8. .....I would be grateful...

9. Yours faithfully

10. Doctor1. Re: Mrs Constance Maxwell

DOB: 8 August 1934

2. I am writing to refer Mrs Constance Maxwell who presented with symptoms such as oedema of upper and lower eyelids as well as white and sticky discharge from eyes.

3. On 21 February 2006, (use the same date format throughout the letter.)

4. She was diagnosed with bilateral conjunctivitis..

5. She was prescribed Chlorsig drops, one drop in each eye every four hours.

6. On 3 March 2006,..

7. When she revisited today, she appeared very distressed. She couldn't read or watch television due to worsening symptoms.

8. .....I would be grateful...

9. Yours faithfully

10. Doctor