289. IRAM SHEHZADI - - Nurse -

ANDREW O' CONNOR - Case Notes - Nursing - Writing

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I am referring (you can easily save two words)

Who is recuperating

a stroke

At his home

Avoid using or double check before using unnecessary connectors. ( Subsequently, in addition, of note, please note, consequently, kindly, therefore etc.)

at the time of discharge, (needed a comma)

His progress was slow

Avoid writing unnecessary information

Avoid writing all relevant information in one sentence as a request. Connect information logically.

Follow up information and timing can be separated into another paragraph