280. LIGY SIBI - Nurse - OET-Writing - QualityCheck - SHEILA CARTWRIGHT

280. LIGY SIBI - - Nurse -
SHEILA CARTWRIGHT - Case Notes - Nursing - Writing
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I am referring (you can easily save two words)
Sentence continuation problem in the introduction.
She requires...
No need a comma before for which
Avoid using or double check before using unnecessary connectors. ( Subsequently, in addition, of note, please note, consequently, kindly, therefore etc.)
In the left foot or in her left foot
Avoid phrases like apart from that.