293. JINU SHAJU - Nurse - OET-Writing - QualityCheck - BRUCE BREW

293. JINU SHAJU - - Nurse -
BRUCE BREW - Case Notes - Nursing - Writing
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This is not a referral letter.
It's a transfer letter.
Avoid using or double check before using unnecessary connectors. ( Subsequently, in addition, of note, please note, consequently, kindly, therefore etc.)
No need a semicolon before which
He has a family history
Consuming alcohol
Which includes
And & as well as are not interchangeable